DESCRIBE SOMEONE

Per response for: Nayeli Hernández Pascual.
By: Mónica López Olmos.

Dear Nayeli:
I think that the topic sentence can finish after ``too much'', and then you say ''she helps me when...''. In the second sentence you can replace'' make'' for ''do'' in that context, and ''as'' for ''like''. I think that after ''as'', the verb ''prepare'' have to include ''-ing'' and also ''help''. In the last sentence I think that ''with'' must be replaced by ''for''. I think that the next must include two or three supporting sentences more which count what you like to do with your mother. There isn't any conclusion because you don't have enought time so you must include it in the next text.

• NEW TEXT:

 My mother is a person who I admire too much.
She helps me when I don't know do anything. She is a good example of perfect women, because she can do many things at the same time, like preparing the food, helping my brother for his homework...
I like tell my problems to my mother because she helps me when I can't find a solution. I'm too insegure, so my mother gives me the confidence that I need.
When she's buying new clothes, she asks me if I like the clothes. I'm her perssonal advisor. 
We love go shopping, making chocolate cakes...
I've learnt many things from her, and I hope learn more thing in mi life.
My mum is an important person in mi life, together with my dad and brothers. Is my example to follow and my best model.